Lady Pirate

umm... sound good.

I agree, this is good, but who is it. I know that you want to let us sort of find out for ourselves, but come on, do tell...

The only thing that I can find technically wrong with this is, you have a few fragments, but those are very easily fixed. I am a stickler when it come ...

I like it I like it a lot

At first I was thinking: don't tell us...show us! But then I got the end, I didn't want you to show me, I wanted you to tell me, so that ...

To me this poem lacks emotion, and to me a poem that has death in the first line should evoke emotion. The word death by itself should be enough to ...

This is really, really, really, really, really cool, so I guess that make's it super cool. I can see a mean very.... distantly. Maybe you could just clear it up ...

You have a very nice vocabulary, and as far as potty-humour goes it's too wordy for me.

It's like scrammbled eggs, and I got a little confushed. work on the punctuation, just work on clearing everything up a bit, because right now it is a little mucky.

You have a desent start here. Your have a great title, that's why i looked at it in the first place. --First thing first, work on your spacing, it will ...

but that UK books are all altered for the American market, Not ALLhe books are altered, just the major ones like Harry Potter

Oh, yeah this catches the conceited air of teenage-two-faced-girls. Very Nice!

Okay: The note at the top of page in bold needs to go by-by. If you have time to write that out, and put it in bold, you have time ...

First thing first, you have a great start here, but I almost didn't read it becuase you said: kind of a slow start, but it'll speed up. Don't tell us ...

This is a very good start, I am very intrested in seeing what happed to her family, only only complaint is this: edge of the cliff, where rocks tumbled down ...